This essay was without a doubt one of the worst I have ever written. There were other things going on in my life that distracted me and left me unfocused. The time frame felt too short as well. I had a horrible time with research, I'm not sure if it was the use of the data bases or maybe I wasn’t creative enough with my search terms.
There was nothing I did well or enjoyed on this essay. I resented the “analytical with creative elements”, Even though Craig said that could have been simply a guideline. I didn’t like that we were split into states. Although the one thing I liked was the community posting of useful sources, that was potentially helpful.
I feel the best way to learn from this experience is to either
A. Forget everything about this essay and move on or
B. Look at this essay as a negative example for all further writing.
Next time we start an essay, hopefully there won’t be so much going on at home so I will be able to focus and really put some time into my research. If that happens, maybe Ill have something worth reading next time.
Monday, November 24, 2008
Friday, November 21, 2008
Essay 2 Final
As a citizen of the state of New Jersey, I know where my loyalties lie. I have seen, as my fellow patriots have, the many injustices and tyrannies committed by Great Britain against us. Their behavior is incorrigible and indefensible. She strikes now at the very core of our values, taking from us what is never meant to be taken. I have seen horrible battles and unnecessary bloodshed taking place in my own backyard caused by conflicts with the Tories. Our ancestors were forced to flee from Britain to escape religious persecution; now however, we are strong enough to fight back that same cause. Those that blindly and willingly support this tyranny over us are just as dangerous as the great power we seek independence from. As patriots, our duty to those who are fighting now, to those who died in their fight for freedom, and to those brave men who will spill blood for our cause isn’t blind support. Our duty is to demand change. Demand that the monarchy gives us back the rights we were born with, and demand that we be given the same rights as any Englishmen. I am a patriot to fight these unjust laws, underhanded taxes and vicious oppression.
Firstly, in enforcing these unjust laws and underhanded taxes, Britain has infringed on our natural rights. The purpose of government is to serve the interests of the people. The rights of the monarchy stop at cruelty, and they have far surpassed that line. It is not wrong that one group of people should lead over the masses? In our own constitution, we are entitled,” That all criminals shall be admitted to the same privileges of witnesses and counsel, as their prosecutors are or shall be entitled to.” (Avalon). There have been too many instances to name where the accused have been tried with no impartiality. Further, Britain chooses to fight New Jersey on our ground. Coming to this land, this state, they attempt to deprecate the ideas of the hearts and minds of people. The monarchy is compromised, instead of a pillar of strength; a greedy clique taxes the people of this state into poverty.
Britain has slapped us with a title akin to slave. Our society is built on the principal of justice; we are receiving neither justice nor respect. The king had long abused all of the colonies, treating us like enemies instead of kin. There is no difference between New Jersyians and menial workers now. We are having our core taken from us, our backbone, inarguable birthrights. Patrick Henry concurs, “I consider it as nothing less than a question of freedom or slavery”. Do we wish to bend our backs to the cruelties committed? Will we bend like serfs to the will of a power 3000 miles away? No. We should stand together united, as a single thinking force. We are no different than those souls in England. We are the same people, suffering under the same despotism. Why are we impaired by laws, why are our towns filled with soldiers, why are we crippled from full potential? It isn’t equitable.
What could be more critical than our independence from this despotic government? As Tomas Paine stated, “The sun never shined on a cause of greater worth”. If you do not wish to raise a fist against injustice for yourself, if you as a citizen do not care about the deprivation, the starvation of freedoms that are rightfully yours, consider the future generations. One who inflects cruelties will do it again, even larger in scale. For your children, for your husbands and sons facing an imposing army, the cause is of utmost importance. Britain can burn our towns, it may exert more wrongs upon us, and patriot blood will be spilt. But we are a state, tied together, bonded through our hardships, our sights singularly focused on the great power looming over us. The time is now for revolutionary behavior. This is a war that will be remembered by all, because it is just that: a revolution. As a united whole, the people state of New Jersey will join this desperate fight. Oppression will be stopped. Taxes will be revoked. Laws will be repealed. The people of New Jersey are worthy of fair governing, just taxes, and freedom from oppression.
Bill, Alfred Hoyt. New Jersey and the Revolutionary War. Rutgers University Press, 1992.
“Constitution of New Jersey; 1776” http://avalon.law.yale.edu/18th_century/nj15.asp
Henry, Patrick. "Give me Liberty or Give me Death." 23 Mar 1775 Page 1, Paragraph 1. 17 Nov 2008 .
Paine, Tomas. "Thoughts on Present State of American Affairs." Common Sense Page 1, paragraph 4. 17 Nov 2008 .
Firstly, in enforcing these unjust laws and underhanded taxes, Britain has infringed on our natural rights. The purpose of government is to serve the interests of the people. The rights of the monarchy stop at cruelty, and they have far surpassed that line. It is not wrong that one group of people should lead over the masses? In our own constitution, we are entitled,” That all criminals shall be admitted to the same privileges of witnesses and counsel, as their prosecutors are or shall be entitled to.” (Avalon). There have been too many instances to name where the accused have been tried with no impartiality. Further, Britain chooses to fight New Jersey on our ground. Coming to this land, this state, they attempt to deprecate the ideas of the hearts and minds of people. The monarchy is compromised, instead of a pillar of strength; a greedy clique taxes the people of this state into poverty.
Britain has slapped us with a title akin to slave. Our society is built on the principal of justice; we are receiving neither justice nor respect. The king had long abused all of the colonies, treating us like enemies instead of kin. There is no difference between New Jersyians and menial workers now. We are having our core taken from us, our backbone, inarguable birthrights. Patrick Henry concurs, “I consider it as nothing less than a question of freedom or slavery”. Do we wish to bend our backs to the cruelties committed? Will we bend like serfs to the will of a power 3000 miles away? No. We should stand together united, as a single thinking force. We are no different than those souls in England. We are the same people, suffering under the same despotism. Why are we impaired by laws, why are our towns filled with soldiers, why are we crippled from full potential? It isn’t equitable.
What could be more critical than our independence from this despotic government? As Tomas Paine stated, “The sun never shined on a cause of greater worth”. If you do not wish to raise a fist against injustice for yourself, if you as a citizen do not care about the deprivation, the starvation of freedoms that are rightfully yours, consider the future generations. One who inflects cruelties will do it again, even larger in scale. For your children, for your husbands and sons facing an imposing army, the cause is of utmost importance. Britain can burn our towns, it may exert more wrongs upon us, and patriot blood will be spilt. But we are a state, tied together, bonded through our hardships, our sights singularly focused on the great power looming over us. The time is now for revolutionary behavior. This is a war that will be remembered by all, because it is just that: a revolution. As a united whole, the people state of New Jersey will join this desperate fight. Oppression will be stopped. Taxes will be revoked. Laws will be repealed. The people of New Jersey are worthy of fair governing, just taxes, and freedom from oppression.
Bill, Alfred Hoyt. New Jersey and the Revolutionary War. Rutgers University Press, 1992.
“Constitution of New Jersey; 1776” http://avalon.law.yale.edu/18th_century/nj15.asp
Henry, Patrick. "Give me Liberty or Give me Death." 23 Mar 1775 Page 1, Paragraph 1. 17 Nov 2008 .
Paine, Tomas. "Thoughts on Present State of American Affairs." Common Sense Page 1, paragraph 4. 17 Nov 2008 .
Monday, November 17, 2008
Essay 2 rough draft
As a citizen of the state of New Jersey, I know where my loyalties lie. I have seen, as my fellow people have, the many injustices and tyrannies committed by the state of Great Britain against us. Their behavior is incorrigible and indefensible. Once a warm and loving parent, she now strikes at the very core of our values, taking from us what is never meant to be taken. I have seen, in my own backyard, horrible battles and unnecessary bloodshed. Our ancestors fled from Britain to escape persecution; now we are strong enough to fight back for a similar cause. The loyalists are just as dangerous to us as the great power we seek independence from. They support, blindly and willingly, tyranny of men. This is our duty to those who are fighting now, to those who died in their fight for freedom, and to those brave men who will spill blood for our cause. Patriotism is the most important cause we will live to see.
Firstly, in enforcing these unjust laws and underhanded taxes, Britain has infringed on our natural rights. It is not intrinsic (inherent) that one group of people should lead over the masses. The time is now for revolutionary ideas and rebellious behavior. This is a battle that will be remembered by all, because it is just that. A Revolution. Further, Britain chooses to fight New Jersey on our ground. Coming to this land, this state, they attempt to deprecate the ideas of the hearts and minds of people. The monarchy is compromised, instead of a pillar of strength and purity; now a greedy clique taxes the people of these colonies into poverty. The purpose of government is to serve the interests of the people, the rights of the monarchy stop at cruelty, and they have far surpassed that line. As Tomas Paine stated, “The sun never shined on a cause of greater worth” (Paine)
They have slapped us with the aspersion of slave, not citizen. Our society is built on the principal of justice; we are receiving neither justice nor respect. The king had long abused all of the colonies, treating us like were enemies instead of kin. There is no difference between New Jersyians and menial workers now. We are having our core taken from us, our backbone, inarguable birthrights. Patrick Henry concurs, “I consider it as nothing less than a question of freedom or slavery”(Henry) . Do we wish to bend our backs to the cruelties committed? Will we bend like serfs to the will of a power 3000 miles away? No. We should stand together united, as a single thinking force. We are no different than those souls in England. We are the same people, suffering under the same despotism. Why are we impaired by laws, why are our towns filled with soldiers, why are we crippled from full potential? It isn’t equitable.
The people of New Jersey are worthy of freedom. We are no longer a small group of people 3000 miles away from home; we are no longer a huddled mass waiting for handouts. New Jersey is “The best country I have seen for people of middling fortunes who live by the sweat of their brows”- Jonathan Belcher. (Bill 3-4).
What could be more critical than our independence from this despotic government? If you do not wish to raise a fist against injustice for yourself, If you as a citizen do not care about the deprivation, the starvation of freedoms, that are rightfully yours, consider the future generations. One who inflects cruelties will do it again, even larger in scale. For your children, the cause is of utmost significance. For your husbands and sons facing an imposing army, the cause is of utmost importance. Britain can burn our towns, it may exert more wrongs upon us, patriot blood will be spilt. We are a state, tied together, bonded through our hardships, our sights singularly focused on the great power looming over us. But now we have the strength to fight. As a community, as a united whole, the people state of New Jersey must join this desperate fight. We will win.
Bill, Alfred Hoyt. New Jersey and the Revolutionary War. Rutgers University Press, 1992.
Henry, Patrick. "Give me Liberty or Give me Death." 23 Mar 1775 Page 1, Paragraph 1. 17 Nov 2008 .
Paine, Tomas. "Thoughts on Present State of American Affairs." Common Sense Page 1, paragraph 4. 17 Nov 2008 .
Firstly, in enforcing these unjust laws and underhanded taxes, Britain has infringed on our natural rights. It is not intrinsic (inherent) that one group of people should lead over the masses. The time is now for revolutionary ideas and rebellious behavior. This is a battle that will be remembered by all, because it is just that. A Revolution. Further, Britain chooses to fight New Jersey on our ground. Coming to this land, this state, they attempt to deprecate the ideas of the hearts and minds of people. The monarchy is compromised, instead of a pillar of strength and purity; now a greedy clique taxes the people of these colonies into poverty. The purpose of government is to serve the interests of the people, the rights of the monarchy stop at cruelty, and they have far surpassed that line. As Tomas Paine stated, “The sun never shined on a cause of greater worth” (Paine)
They have slapped us with the aspersion of slave, not citizen. Our society is built on the principal of justice; we are receiving neither justice nor respect. The king had long abused all of the colonies, treating us like were enemies instead of kin. There is no difference between New Jersyians and menial workers now. We are having our core taken from us, our backbone, inarguable birthrights. Patrick Henry concurs, “I consider it as nothing less than a question of freedom or slavery”(Henry) . Do we wish to bend our backs to the cruelties committed? Will we bend like serfs to the will of a power 3000 miles away? No. We should stand together united, as a single thinking force. We are no different than those souls in England. We are the same people, suffering under the same despotism. Why are we impaired by laws, why are our towns filled with soldiers, why are we crippled from full potential? It isn’t equitable.
The people of New Jersey are worthy of freedom. We are no longer a small group of people 3000 miles away from home; we are no longer a huddled mass waiting for handouts. New Jersey is “The best country I have seen for people of middling fortunes who live by the sweat of their brows”- Jonathan Belcher. (Bill 3-4).
What could be more critical than our independence from this despotic government? If you do not wish to raise a fist against injustice for yourself, If you as a citizen do not care about the deprivation, the starvation of freedoms, that are rightfully yours, consider the future generations. One who inflects cruelties will do it again, even larger in scale. For your children, the cause is of utmost significance. For your husbands and sons facing an imposing army, the cause is of utmost importance. Britain can burn our towns, it may exert more wrongs upon us, patriot blood will be spilt. We are a state, tied together, bonded through our hardships, our sights singularly focused on the great power looming over us. But now we have the strength to fight. As a community, as a united whole, the people state of New Jersey must join this desperate fight. We will win.
Bill, Alfred Hoyt. New Jersey and the Revolutionary War. Rutgers University Press, 1992.
Henry, Patrick. "Give me Liberty or Give me Death." 23 Mar 1775 Page 1, Paragraph 1. 17 Nov 2008 .
Paine, Tomas. "Thoughts on Present State of American Affairs." Common Sense Page 1, paragraph 4. 17 Nov 2008 .
Sunday, November 16, 2008
Essay #2 draft (unfinished)
As a citizen of the state of New Jersey, I know where my loyalties lie. I have seen, as my fellow people have, the many injustices and tyrannies committed by the state of Great Britain against us. Once a warm and loving parent, she now strikes at the very core of our values, taking from us what is never meant to be taken. I have seen, in my own backyard, horrible battles and unnecessary bloodshed. Our ancestors fled from Britain to escape persecution; now we are strong enough to fight back for a similar cause. This is our duty, to those who died in their fight for freedom, to those who are fighting now, and to those brave men who will spill blood for the patriot cause.
In enforcing these unjust laws and underhanded taxes, Britain has pushed us too far. Our society is built on the principal of justice; we are receiving neither justice not respect. The king had long abused all of the colonies, treating us like were enemies instead of kin. The monarchy is compromised, instead of the pillar of strength and purity it was; now it’s a greedy corrupt clique taxing the people of these colonies into poverty. They do not have the right to control our people like they are. The purpose of government is to serve the interests of the people, the rights of the monarchy stop at cruelty, and they have far surpassed that line. As a community, as a united whole, the people state of New Jersey must join this desperate fight. We will win. Britain can burn our towns, it may exert more wrongs upon us, but this is a cause that has the most importance. As Tomas Paine stated, “The sun never shined on a cause of greater worth” (Thomas Paine, “Thoughts on the present state of American affairs”). What could be more critical than our independence from this despotic government? If you do not wish to raise a fist against injustice for yourself, consider the future generations. One who inflects cruelties will do it again, even larger in scale. For your children, the cause is of utmost significance. For your husbands and sons facing an imposing army, the cause is of utmost importance.
There is no difference between New Jersyians and menial peons now. We are having our core taken from us, our backbone, inarguable birthrights. Do we wish to bend our backs to the cruelties committed? Will we bend like slaves to the will of a power 3000 miles away? No. We should stand together, united, as a single thinking force. Patrick Henry concurs in his article, Give me Liberty or Give me Death, “I consider it as nothing less than a question of freedom or slavery”. We are no different than those souls in England. We are the same people, suffering under the same despotism. Why are we impaired by laws, why are our towns filled with soldiers, why are we crippled from full potential? It isn’t equitable. New Jersey is, “The best country I have seen for people of middling fortunes who live by the sweat of their brows”- Jonathan Belcher. (Bill 3-4)
The people of New Jersey are worthy of freedom. We are no longer a small group of people 3000 miles away from home. We are no longer a huddled mass waiting for handouts. We are a state, tied together, bonded through our hardships, our sights singularly focused on the great power looming over us. But now we have the strength to fight.
Bill, Alfred Hoyt. New Jersey and the Revolutionary War. Rutgers University Press, 1992.
In enforcing these unjust laws and underhanded taxes, Britain has pushed us too far. Our society is built on the principal of justice; we are receiving neither justice not respect. The king had long abused all of the colonies, treating us like were enemies instead of kin. The monarchy is compromised, instead of the pillar of strength and purity it was; now it’s a greedy corrupt clique taxing the people of these colonies into poverty. They do not have the right to control our people like they are. The purpose of government is to serve the interests of the people, the rights of the monarchy stop at cruelty, and they have far surpassed that line. As a community, as a united whole, the people state of New Jersey must join this desperate fight. We will win. Britain can burn our towns, it may exert more wrongs upon us, but this is a cause that has the most importance. As Tomas Paine stated, “The sun never shined on a cause of greater worth” (Thomas Paine, “Thoughts on the present state of American affairs”). What could be more critical than our independence from this despotic government? If you do not wish to raise a fist against injustice for yourself, consider the future generations. One who inflects cruelties will do it again, even larger in scale. For your children, the cause is of utmost significance. For your husbands and sons facing an imposing army, the cause is of utmost importance.
There is no difference between New Jersyians and menial peons now. We are having our core taken from us, our backbone, inarguable birthrights. Do we wish to bend our backs to the cruelties committed? Will we bend like slaves to the will of a power 3000 miles away? No. We should stand together, united, as a single thinking force. Patrick Henry concurs in his article, Give me Liberty or Give me Death, “I consider it as nothing less than a question of freedom or slavery”. We are no different than those souls in England. We are the same people, suffering under the same despotism. Why are we impaired by laws, why are our towns filled with soldiers, why are we crippled from full potential? It isn’t equitable. New Jersey is, “The best country I have seen for people of middling fortunes who live by the sweat of their brows”- Jonathan Belcher. (Bill 3-4)
The people of New Jersey are worthy of freedom. We are no longer a small group of people 3000 miles away from home. We are no longer a huddled mass waiting for handouts. We are a state, tied together, bonded through our hardships, our sights singularly focused on the great power looming over us. But now we have the strength to fight.
Bill, Alfred Hoyt. New Jersey and the Revolutionary War. Rutgers University Press, 1992.
Thursday, November 13, 2008
Essay 2 Outline
Patriotism in New Jersey is the only course of action because:
I. Our natural rights are being infringed upon
A. It is not constitutional that one group of people should lead over the masses (oligarchy/ monarchy)
B. This is a cause that will set a precedent for all future generations
i. “The sun never shined on a cause of greater worth” (Thomas Paine, “Thoughts on the present state of American affairs”
II. Because we will be turned into slaves
A. If we continue to let Britain strip us of our rights, what is the difference between us and slaves?
i. “ I consider it as nothing less than a question of freedom or slavery” (Patrick Henry, “Give me Liberty or Give me Death”
III. We have outgrown Britain
A. Their governing has become tyrannical in nature
i. “We may as well assert that because a child has thrived upon milk, that it is never to have meat.” (Tomas Paine, “Thoughts on the present state of American affairs)
ii. “ She [Britain] did not protect us from our enemies on our account, but from her enemies on her account” (Tomas Paine, “Thoughts on the present state of American affairs)
B. We are strong enough to hold our own( stable enough to be a world power)
I. Our natural rights are being infringed upon
A. It is not constitutional that one group of people should lead over the masses (oligarchy/ monarchy)
B. This is a cause that will set a precedent for all future generations
i. “The sun never shined on a cause of greater worth” (Thomas Paine, “Thoughts on the present state of American affairs”
II. Because we will be turned into slaves
A. If we continue to let Britain strip us of our rights, what is the difference between us and slaves?
i. “ I consider it as nothing less than a question of freedom or slavery” (Patrick Henry, “Give me Liberty or Give me Death”
III. We have outgrown Britain
A. Their governing has become tyrannical in nature
i. “We may as well assert that because a child has thrived upon milk, that it is never to have meat.” (Tomas Paine, “Thoughts on the present state of American affairs)
ii. “ She [Britain] did not protect us from our enemies on our account, but from her enemies on her account” (Tomas Paine, “Thoughts on the present state of American affairs)
B. We are strong enough to hold our own( stable enough to be a world power)
Thursday, November 6, 2008
justification
Justifications,
Bacon
Bacon was a wealthy Englishman who believed that Native Americans were dangerous enemies, not peaceful friends He beleived that they must be killed to protect the colony
and the violent acts by the Native Americans before the rebellion
The Indians, however, became exceedingly more hostile after Bacon started attacking.
The Indians retaliated by killing colonists, setting traps, and even capturing the colonists
Government
Bacon’s Rebellion was caused by corruption in the Virginian government and mistrust between the native tribes.
However, William Berkeley, the governor of the colony, had a different view towards the Native Americans.
Natives
Native Americans wanted peace with the colonists most of the time.
Eventually, most of the settlers hated keeping the peace with, what they saw as. the savage people, and were not given the respect or shown respect from the government they thought they had deserved as the established people of Jamestown.
Bacon
Bacon was a wealthy Englishman who believed that Native Americans were dangerous enemies, not peaceful friends He beleived that they must be killed to protect the colony
and the violent acts by the Native Americans before the rebellion
The Indians, however, became exceedingly more hostile after Bacon started attacking.
The Indians retaliated by killing colonists, setting traps, and even capturing the colonists
Government
Bacon’s Rebellion was caused by corruption in the Virginian government and mistrust between the native tribes.
However, William Berkeley, the governor of the colony, had a different view towards the Native Americans.
Natives
Native Americans wanted peace with the colonists most of the time.
Eventually, most of the settlers hated keeping the peace with, what they saw as. the savage people, and were not given the respect or shown respect from the government they thought they had deserved as the established people of Jamestown.
Monday, November 3, 2008
11/3 homework
As Craig has already pointed out, the Psec Advisory Council mirrors the First Continental Congress. Psec is similar to Early America with its diversity (especially the middle colonies like New York and New Jersey, thank you Ben) and the strength of its community. In the upcoming elections, we face a different problem that the one Early Colonists did. I think if Psec was severely flawed, the situations would be more similar. Psec (in my view) is under no imminent threat, so I don’t quite see the connection there. But if it was, the power we hold as students, as members of a widely varied community is exactly the same. The leaders of the advisory council would speak for the mass, the people, the individual voice, which is exactly what the first Continental Congress did. They did not act of their own accord, they themselves deciding what was best for the masses, how could they? They would not be any better than the tyrannical English.
I think that Psec is great the way it is. If I saw some gaping defect, I would no doubt bring it up to someone. But I, in the synonym of the continental congress, am a happy citizen. I’m in no hurry to change the way things are run here, just because it’s possible. Students of Psec should not take for granted the fact that they can change things, and I don’t think they do.
I think that Psec is great the way it is. If I saw some gaping defect, I would no doubt bring it up to someone. But I, in the synonym of the continental congress, am a happy citizen. I’m in no hurry to change the way things are run here, just because it’s possible. Students of Psec should not take for granted the fact that they can change things, and I don’t think they do.
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